Home coming

Homecoming

My family and i had been away for so long on holiday. Now we had returned and didn't expect it be like this. The snow was crunching behind us as walked through the streets that were once Hollywood. The Blue fierce lightning struck . a stray cat growled as it was searching for food in a dumpster behind an old church.

We got home  now it was was now a big flat building laying on the ground. “ What had happened,?” I thought to myself for a moment. The wind was picking up the rain was getting heavy soon it was as powerful as a shower. The blue lightning struck it was like static electricity in the sky we knew we had to find cover.

Somehow the sirens of the town were still working saying that there was a tornado coming over and over but we could barely hear it because it blurred out after a couple of minutes. Where could me and my family find some cover until the tornado passes everything had collapsed and there was no one to be seen. Everyone must all got caught in the tornado and died.

In the distance could see the tornado  and it was coming and wasn't going to slow down. I can hear a voice echoing I thought I was crazy how could someone survive such a crazy storm that wiped out the whole city. But the voice was getting closer and in the distance we  could see another lady. We were  soooo relieved to see another person. As we got closer to the girl she looked really beaten up. She told us how she and her family survived.

The lady's name was kamilla. She said her and her family had and underground room that saved them from the storm Kamila said she would take me and my family to there room for shelter!. We were so relieved that we were not the only family in the city. She lead us to her family they had everything they needed like food, Water, warmth.

The storm was close and we were preparing the storm hit the impact was strong the tornado was getting close we were all screaming the roof started to tear apart we had no cover the toronado was so strong and just like that the city went silent again like before the tornado   was gone but something was missing…..


Kamilla and her family there gone WAIT!           “wheres my family?......”  



By  Ruby Hart




      


Comments

  1. Anonymous22 June 2017 at 17:20

    feedback: I like how the story flowed
    feedback: maybe you could add some more senses and similes to make it more internalising

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  2. Anonymous25 June 2017 at 14:42

    wow what a grate peace of writing i like how you have told me what is happening

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  3. Anonymous27 June 2017 at 14:44

    Hi Ruby
    This is an amazing pace of writing. I love the ending it makes me want to know what happens next.
    Did you get inspiration for this writing?
    Yours sincerely Charlotte from Oamaru Intermediate School

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